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Eakes wrote:

Dan only thinks that match report doesn't work as there is no mentin of the name "Dan Flynn" anywhere.

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Eakes wrote:

Dan only thinks that match report doesn't work as there is no mentin of the name "Dan Flynn" anywhere.

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raelini wrote:

This is the finished draft:

Two rash challenges inside eight second half minutes saw Villa’s pugnacious midfielder Nigel Reo-Coker make an early exit on the hour mark,

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How about...

A second booking saw Villa's pugnacious.....

That'd save you the time, although it doesn't sound quite as good.

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That doesn't work.

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nathan8 wrote:

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iwenttoistanbul wrote:

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nathan8 wrote:

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raelini wrote:

This is the finished draft:

Two rash challenges inside eight second half minutes saw Villa’s pugnacious midfielder Nigel Reo-Coker make an early exit on the hour mark,

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How about...

A second booking saw Villa's pugnacious.....

That'd save you the time, although it doesn't sound quite as good.

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That doesn't work.

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How does it not work? What is wrong about...

"A second booking saw Villa's pugnacious midfielder Nigel Reo-Coker make an early exit on the hour mark,"

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iwenttoistanbul wrote:

It just says about second yellow with no reference to him getting the first one, just confused me slightly. Go on start the jibes.

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raelini wrote:

did my report at 3.45, i think the course leader quite liked it; as much as you can do when you've been in their since 11.00 hearing a report every 5 minutes!

i didn't make any mistakes, which was good as i was worried i was going to get tongue tied when it came to Gabriel Agbonlahor!

thanks for the feedback/ideas, i'll be sure to use the board as a test audience in future whenever the next one may be!

on the point of radio bulletins, one of my mates did a brilliant one the other day in a practise run. he said he was in the mood for puns when he wrote the report for Denmark 1-3 Spain, which he began something like:

The Great Danes bark was worse than their bite as they slumped to a defeat against a dogged Spain side.

it also included references to Denmark making a dogs dinner of numerous chances, and Spain sending them home with their tails between their legs, and even the lecturer was loving it!

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raelini wrote:

did my report at 3.45, i think the course leader quite liked it; as much as you can do when you've been in their since 11.00 hearing a report every 5 minutes!

i didn't make any mistakes, which was good as i was worried i was going to get tongue tied when it came to Gabriel Agbonlahor!

thanks for the feedback/ideas, i'll be sure to use the board as a test audience in future whenever the next one may be!

on the point of radio bulletins, one of my mates did a brilliant one the other day in a practise run. he said he was in the mood for puns when he wrote the report for Denmark 1-3 Spain, which he began something like:

The Great Danes bark was worse than their bite as they slumped to a defeat against a dogged Spain side.

it also included references to Denmark making a dogs dinner of numerous chances, and Spain sending them home with their tails between their legs, and even the lecturer was loving it!

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Eakes wrote:

Dan only thinks that match report doesn't work as there is no mentin of the name "Dan Flynn" anywhere.

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