Charlie06
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Fall Of Lady Shimizu
Hey guys
I posted this story on another board but I figure it could be posted here as well 10 evil babes are killed in this story by a lone assassin. The story is kinda of long but it reads quickly. Read and review if you like and mods if this is not the type of story for this board let me know before you delete my thread.
Thanks and Enjoy
Charlie
Last edited by Charlie06, 8/23/2007, 5:11 am
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Stuelpner Karl
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Re: Fall Of Lady Shimizu
Not bad as a "Silenced Sentries" story, but for an "Evil Babe" story the bad girls should do a bit more evil before meeting their fate.
They fight like lazy sentries, not like top assassins, so the story is a bit one-sided.
Basically it's written like an ego-shooter game: The heroine sees an opponent (she alway sees them first), kills her, does something with the body, collects items, and moves on to the next level.
However, it's a pretty good mixture of different types of bad girls. It would have been more exciting to have several of them introduced before the killing started. So the reader might guess who will die and who will make it into the next chapter.
("10 evil babes are killed in this story by a lone assassin" is a huge SPOILER!)
Anyway, thanks for the story, keep on writing,
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