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David Meadows
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#35 Synopsis
After saving the world from a demonic invasion, there's nothing better than a slice of apple pie...
Thanksgiving
--- "The surest way to corrupt a youth is to instruct him to hold in higher regard those who think alike than those who think differently."
-- Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche, _The Dawn_.
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1/7/2006, 20:49
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Ray Oceanweaver
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Re: #35 Synopsis
Oh, that is so not funny.
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1/7/2006, 21:10
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Blitzen
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Re: #35 Synopsis
Liked it. Kind of felt short, though.
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1/7/2006, 22:48
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Re: #35 Synopsis
4500 words, which puts it among the lower 20% of issues ranked by length, but maybe it feels short because not much happens? It's a collection of character flashes rather than an advancing narrative, and has no key turning points to anchor the reader's sense sense of pace.
See how I can come out with literary pseudo-jargon to make it sound like I know what I'm talking about?
As always, thanks for the feedback
--- "I don't need infinite power in my hands. Just confidence in my own abilities." -- James, Heroes issue 35: Thanksgiving
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2/7/2006, 9:01
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Re: #35 Synopsis
Well, apart from the bit where he finally confirmed his Dad, "...was never Major Democracy!" I really liked the (perhaps unintended?) Foghorn Leghorn reference to chicken hawks on page 9, panel 3.
Aye, sod your pseudo literary jargon Dave, I just like cartoon references, ha ha!
To illustrate, there's an ace Foghorn quote which could perhaps occasionally (and admittedly cruelly) be applied to Chi-Yun.
"Ah say, nice girl, but about as sharp as a bag of wet mice..."
Eeeeh, ain't I a stinker?
Still, got to agree with Blitzen, it were a bit short. But that's surely cos you're merely setting 'em up for a big fight and/or ambush scene next issue. Cos being a long time comics reader I know it's nearly always disastrous when a team splits, no matter what the reason. Plus I can't think of a better way to screw up Thanksgiving.
Couple that with a potential crisis of confidence...
So, who's going to get ambushed first?
P.S. Did the Major's Mam really have to be called Martha? Ray could have a point there, though maybes I can succeed in distracting her into defending Chi-Yun...
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3/7/2006, 13:11
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Ray Oceanweaver
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Re: #35 Synopsis
So... anyone notice something funny about the "replacement" shield?
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3/7/2006, 18:29
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Re: #35 Synopsis
Uuh, nope. Though I concede my lack of elementary perception is well nigh legendary.
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4/7/2006, 11:17
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*sigh* 
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4/7/2006, 14:40
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Re: #35 Synopsis
It's the only thing that can stop a demon?
It just got itself the Major role in a comic?
Ooh, heres a thought
quote: The Shield said:
I was always more important to the plot than you Major Democracy.
Stuart
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"And sometimes you get what's coming around."
"And sometime you are what's coming around."
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4/7/2006, 21:14
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Re: #35 Synopsis
Ambushed: I'm betting Fred. Or Chi Yun.
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It's not clicky, though, sorry
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4/7/2006, 22:21
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