sombersoul
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Untitled - A Poem
So I started writing a few months ago, about feelings and stuff. I'm not great, but wanted to share what I have and even ask for some friendly criticism! 
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The body serves as a temple for the soul
Keeping the precious entity guarded within
Ever going the days keep passing by
The depth of her beauty keeps growing inside
Just the smallest details add beauty and life
No harm can come while behind these walls
As time goes by our soul will immerge
For our beauty forever to walk the earth
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My crime is that of curiosity. I am a hacker and this is my manifesto. You may stop me, but you can't stop us all. ~Hackers
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12/16/2006, 11:15 am
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Lachesis
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Re: Untitled - A Poem
oooh, I like this one.. I kind of feel like you could have kept going with the story you were creating though. In the corner of my eye, I saw your avatar, and i know this sounds funny, but it related to your poem! It makes a great analogy for a flower in bloom.
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12/16/2006, 11:26 am
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