MurdochsAid
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 Expressing sounds in story dialogue
How does one emulate sounds in dialogue; such as actually writing out explosions, the clearing of one's throat, etc. sounds in your storyline?
Does it look something like this? Ka-poo-ee? Or, ka-pow? Or what? :| :escher:
If anyone has any helpful suggestions, then please by all means post them here. Thank you.
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Feb/8/2005, 9:37 am
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bess
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Re: Expressing sounds in story dialogue
Hi MA
sorry i haven't replied sooner. I have only just read your thread.
what type of story are you writing? if you are doing a comic strip, then writing "Ka-pow" in a big, bright bubble would work, but it would sound stupid in the middle of a novel. what age group is your story aimed at? I think your best bet would be to use onomatopea instead of actually typing out the noise the sound makes. if you have a few fictional book handy, have a flick through and see if you can find references to sound, it helps to inspire you. i usually write something like:
Kate sat in her room, listening to the repeated "tick, tick, tick" of the grandfather clock. I try to make it sound better than that, but i am tired lol.
let me know how the story goes. have you written the sound into your dialogue yet? if not, you can tell me what the sound is and i can *try* to help you to convey that sound into your story.
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Feb/22/2005, 9:09 pm
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MurdochsAid
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Re: Expressing sounds in story dialogue
Hi Bess!
It is-was a Titanic fanfic story I was writing. In my story, my character of Carrie was telling Captain Smith about an incident her father witnessed at a Missouri River town, for which he saw a side-wheeler riverboat blow up. Why? Because her captain, like him, was too anxious to get to where he was going. His paasengers were a bunch of Mormons heading west to Salt Lake City.
Why was she telling him this story? It was because Harold Bride had just handed him one of the first of many iceberg warnings on the bridge. Carrie was there on the bridge, because Thomas Andrews, was taking her and her sister, Annie; Red Feather, her unofficially adopted son, Jimmy Lame Deer's birth-mother and nurse; and son, on a tour of the ship. And Captain Smith had just told her not to worry, and that he had just ordered the last remaining boilers lit. Will Murdoch, a widower w/a 4-year old daughter, Maggie, has the hots for Carrie, listened to her story as he stood slightly starboard on the bridge.
Carrie, sneaking a peek at the warning, in her usually animated way, makes the explosion sound just as her father described it to her. That's why I was asking.
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Since Will does not want me to write about anything having to do with Titanic...I feel compelled to honor his wishes. Also, I believe that it is he who is causing me to suffer from what is commonly called "writers' block" as well. In other words, he is in complete control of me--writingwise.:| :escher:
Last edited by MurdochsAid, Feb/24/2005, 11:02 am
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Feb/23/2005, 9:40 am
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