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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
hi prototype001 I agree , I'll manage to finish the story , changing some features and lines but leaving fundamental characters unaltered. Main problem with the original script/battle plan was with the overpowering of many soldier girls... and the problem of the gas canisters too
P.S.did you ever consider a little story about gipsy girls?
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
Thanks esercito sconfitto, the Sleep Away Camp story is now yours to do what ever you want with it. I look forward to see what you come up with.
Also i was thinking about making a little gypsy girl story all together. Because i was thinking of what i could with the scenes, locations and uniform ideas. No guarantee's yet but i really will think about writing one on the excerpt island page - thanks again.
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to be continued
thanks prototype001, thanks very much.This story is growing and growing... and next pages could appear a little bit ruthless
P.S. oh PLEASE a gipsy girls story!you can set it in communist era (Grandburg 1989 or Redssia 1991) or in today's "former evil empire".Do it ,please...
P.P.S.Anyway, these two characters of you are great, may I borrow Rachel and Holly for another mission? To sink a former evil empire's navy battleship in the harbor of crimenian peninsula... by the way , do you have any tip for an all female crew to be overpowered?
P.P.P.S. sorry for my horrible english
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
Hi esercito sconfitto and yes you can borrow Holly and Rachel as many times as you like.
And when you say overpowered, do you mean by overpowering the whole crew at once or do you mean sector by sector??
And i really like the picture and i look forward to the next part.
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holly found a wrong bottle in the infirmary and this gas fryed the brains of these poor blondes
hi prototype, a 25 people crew , a dozen must be (former) soviet style navy marines, holly and rachel should reach this battleship by swimming ( I like to draw bikinis) camouflage battledress' (soviet style )marines apart, sailors should wear dark blue ( or black)miniskirts, black boots and standard soviet navy shirts. ( they wear this uniforms 'til the arrival of holly and rachel, not after their departure ... )
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
Hi esercito sconfitto and this next mission with a soviet style battleship hijacking / taking over, sounds great, and i like the uniform idea's you have for the crew to wear
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
hey prototype001 would you like to write a "how to sink a former evil empire 's battleship " handbook for rachel and holly? you could post it at excerpt island. I mean, NOT A TALE, but a short " official Intelligence " guide for these poor girls who are swimming towards this lethal vessel and are bikini clad : first step, next step, may be in form of battle plan
just an idea
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
Hi esercito sconfitto and that intelligence guide sounds interesting, if i was going to write this guide, what would like me to put in it for you, because i am very interested.
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a) cleaning the desk ( soviet style marines sentries)
b) some off duty sailors in the inner areas ( waylaided one by one)
c) officers in war room
d)sailors in weapons areas
c) crew in dormitory
of course I don't know the exact navy language for these places...
d) strip everyone...
e) sink this damned communist ship
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Re: "sleep away camp " by prototype001
Hi esercito sconfitto and just one more thing i forgot to mention earlier.
Would you like it written as if it was sent to Holly and Rachel by an unknown or known client.
Or would you like it written as if Holly or Rachel wrote it themselves, as if they have done some recon on the soviet ship.
I'm happy to write either one.
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